11:06 p.m. - 2004-01-11
burnthings
BURNTHINGS!
So, I'm not quite sure how to approach this one. I've procastinated this one for a while now because yeah.. it's a short story type of scenario and I'm not sure why I'm "grading" it in the first place.
It's an interesting idea, to have a short story diary type of thing. I have one too. But I think that perhaps critiquing stories like this would be better off in a creative writing class or some such.
But, okay. I liked some of the stories. Some I didn't like. Some, I was just kinda like huhwhathuh? I enjoyed this one because it appealed to the girly side of me. I liked this little quote:
"It took you this long to figure out that you love me, and you're going to walk away? No. I'm sorry, no. I will not be the girl you tell people about when you're old. I won't be the girl you regret. I won't, and you can't make me. You can walk away now, but I'll follow you. I won't make it easy for you to convince yourself that this wouldn't work. Not before you give it a damn chance."
Yeah.
I also liked this one because it reminded me of my creative writing teacher. Yay.
Others, I didn't like so much. I thought the language was kinda flowery and dorkilicious. An example:
"I'm sick of your crap. It's not my problem. None of it is. I'm tired of paying for everyone elses mistakes."
She watched the birds, barely moving now.
I just rolled my eyes with that one.
Moving on. All in all, it was good. She is definitely an excellent writer, but that doesn't always mean she's an interesting one. Keep writing, of course. There's no advice I can give here. I respect writers, because I am one, so I can't really sit here and say that she sucks because she doesn't and who am I to say that anyway?
*takes a breath*
Also, I really like her layout. It's purty. And it just goes well with the whole atmosphere.
I give Burn Things an A.
