1:52 p.m. - 2004-05-26
Laurat
LAURAT!
Let's start with the layout. I hate it. I've seen it sooo many times before and it's not original in any kind of way. Try Beautify, they are sure to have a template that matches your style a little more. I so hate this one.
And hey, how about a bio or a cast list? A cast would be very helpful. Like, this entry confused me. Who are these people you speak of? Are they your parents or seperate people that want to buy you a car? A cast list would be nice.
I also don't know where you're from. Apparently it's in the UK-ish area, but I didn't figure that out for a while. And I certainly hope that the $399 a month you're paying for your gym is not the same as $399 in the States. Seriously.. that's an outrageously high gym membership! I pay $35 a month! So I hope there's some kind of weird conversion thing going on there.
I read a good portion of entries and I'm still not sure what I want to say about it. I think I enjoyed your earlier entries more, like this one about having a bad day. Back when you were first starting this journal, you were a little more introspective. Now you do whole entries on hair removal. While I know that was more tongue and cheek-ish than anything, I don't care much to read about other people's hair removal processes. Really.
When you want to be, you are an awesome writer. There weren't too many entries that displayed that talent, but there was a good portion that I read. Like this great one about our generation being total emotional sluts. Good stuff right there.
I really liked your Seabiscuit entry.
So I'm just kinda "ehhhh" about this diary at the moment. It has the good and it has the bad, and yes, it has the facts of life. But anyway, keep doing what you're doing. Change your template. Add a bio and a cast list. And good luck with life in general.
I give you an 85.
